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another fullmoon

I'm at the crossroad
Where the huge white ball hangs
Quietly in the dark veil of night
Shining down on my little piece of the world
Through vinyl blinds behind a cold, glass, window
above the kitchen sink of my modest abode

My eyes are heavy
Burning from too much reading
I turned in for a restful Saturday morning
Before the break of dawn catches me awake
Lying on my comfy couch in the wee hours of the night
Exhausted, before the day is formed

So goodnight my darlings sleep tight
Let the stars rest in your hearts tonight
As the fullmoon rests in mine
And Jesus's death is celebrated one more time

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I was going to give a few crits, and stopped to read this poem again. I've now read this three or four times maybe five and would not change a single thing. This is brilliant in it's simplicity, and you have captured something quite unique i believe. Love it. Love Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

Glad you like. Thanks for the comment and grit.

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This is truly beautiful writing. The only thing I'd change beside comefy misspell(I think) would be to lose one of the adjectives describing the window in line 5. But truly this is wonderful................stan

I believe I did ran away with adjectives. Lol. Thanks for the kind comment and crit.

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I loved these lines:

So goodnight my darlings sleep tight
Let the stars rest in your hearts tonight
As the fullmoon rests in mine

I have no suggestions, just appreciation for the work.

always, Cat

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Thanks glad you like it. Somehow those lines rhymed effortlessly without me intending but glad they did.

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Thanks for reading and commenting. It was fun to write this small piece.

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Now can you guess
or any one else,

how many such moons
have passed my way
since the blessed day
my first bathday
a wild guess will do

who so ever can be within easy reach
I will compose a memorable poem for you...

loved

Glad you like it.
Wild guess 15. I have no earthly idea

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would make me 15 months old
a genius perhaps
thanks for your wildest guess

loved

I forget how to count sometimes. Its a. Moon a month not a year. Lol

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a seventeen years old mind
trapped in an aeons old body ,
with one extra switch
I can move in and out
at my wish
ie 17 or eonish...
like a FISH!!!

loved

Your poems and comments says as much

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Your poems and comments says as much

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so i can only say with this write you dipped into consciousness's golden stream
i can see nothing i would change

lovely descriptive and i related to all you spoke of
was there doing the same things in my own memory
- then the ending - yes - caused 'that' emotion'
well done
love judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

Thanks for reading and commenting. Your gracious compliment is welcoming.

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Just dropped by to read again....something I don't do very often, This IS poetry...........stan

Glad you did again.

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