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Finger Tips

Arms reach 
Tendons stretch
Finger tips clutch
Inches away

Touching the hem of your garment
Plucking a thread
Pulling away from me
Shoving me into the distance

No purchase
No grasp
No hold
No touch

Your smile tantalises,
the tone of your voice entices.
Your sparkling eyes make promises,
you are not willing to keep.

Torture
Agony
Assault
Battering

Slapping my senses
Why is everything I long for 
Out of reach?

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raw emotions laid threadbare is how i rate this live wire write of yours...

raj (sublime_ocean)

I felt the strength of emotion, the need of something unfulfillable. My only criticism is, that I would not have used the contraction, [ you're ] I would have spelled it out as two words. [ You are ]. ~ Gee

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Thnk you

Lou

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Superb writing here! Loved it all.

always, Cat

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Cat,

Thank you so much.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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there is freedom in deciet
a game of chance
for a prize thats rigged
always more alluring
then the easy moves

sometimes "what ifs"
taste better in thought
then the "sure thing"

great poem Lou
gritty and surreal!

thank you

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Really well well written, very effective. Ending a poem with a question is tricky. Maybe you could have a look at the need for that.

As part of your body of work, you know what I think.

cheers,
Jess
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jeezum, it never fails to amaze me how people know exactly what i feel on this site. no suggestions necessary on my part!

thanks

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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