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Midnight and Rain(Dark Side CHat Poem)

Submitted by China Blue on Sun, 2012-02-05 10:10

The street lamps are reflecting pools of light
From the rain soaked roads
and others peek out from the darkened trees
Cold and clammy night
has fallen just behind the tree line

The roots crept slowly through the yard
Inching toward her feet
She didn't even notice
that the devil called her sweet

Where nothing short of evil could be found
Tendrils crawling on the velvet ground
The moon
blood red usurped the sky
Bat wings flutter
night hawks fly

And only the dead things
wonder why
There was nothing I would do for mine

The living things begin to sigh
while peace is riven
no hope to find
Thoughts of carnage cross my mind

Ghosts and ghouls have made me blind
Our goals lost to midnight
And our hearts defined
I begin to believe
I have lost my mind
Our will to live
was left behind

And the night cries out
You have lost

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Here is a poem by Geezer, Lonnie, Candlewitch,Nichole and China Blue composed in Geezers dark side chat room by those listed. Chat rooms are fun this one was great
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Candlewitch

Sun, 2012-02-05 15:06

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Ahhh, brilliant minds at work in a collaborative effort! Crafty lines, especially my contribution ;) LOL! That was alot of fun! Can't wait to do it again!

always, Cat

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China Blue

Sun, 2012-02-05 15:49

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brilliant minds yes! we didn't have many people there but it worked just as well. It was a lot of fun wasn't it. I'm sure Geezer will be having another room soon.

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

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Geezer

Mon, 2012-02-06 12:21

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I wouldn't have believed that it was going to be that good! It was very fragmented, with all the comments and talking in between. Very nice job! Yes, we will be doing this again! I think tyhat as we do it more often, we will get better. I look forward to the next Chat on the Darkside and hope that everyone will have as much fun as we did this time. ~ Gee

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