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In Awe
The pallid moon rises,
murmuring among the reeds,
skipping on the water,
like a million silver beads.
A solitary loon calls
haunting the starry bright sky,
saturating the air
with the sound of its ghostly cry.
Soft wings glide no hurry,
across the vast inland seas,
sailing on a whisper,
lifted by the sent of a breeze.
A thunderstorm echoes,
shimmering jagged edged light,
flooding the horizon
while wolves howl to the night.
A fireball ascends,
turning the black waters gold,
cascading a rainbow,
just as the day lilies unfold.
River fish swim, no haste,
the placid fresh water bream,
hiding in the weedy fronds,
before making their way up stream.
The hawk sings a soul song,
in tranquil resonance,
riding on the thermals,
while man stands still...in silence.
Comments
Ian.T
Wed, 2013-08-14 19:00
Mand
Beautifully written and a quiet read
that flowed from the evenings light
into the night then on to the dawn.
Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
mand
Fri, 2013-08-16 07:42
Thanks Ian
Glad you like it - I've made a few changes, I hope I haven't spoilt it. I'm always glad of yours and others opinions and I'm grateful you take the time to read, advise and comment.
Great to hear from you.
Love Mand xxxxx
scribbler
Wed, 2013-08-14 23:17
Hi Mand
I like this a lot. A few ideas :stanza 2 line 1 try myriad insread of zillions; stanza 2 line 4 I wonder if red eyed is needed. The first stanza is outstanding and the last one is eloquent in showing man apart from nature..........stan
mand
Fri, 2013-08-16 07:43
STAN! Glad you like it! I'm
STAN! Glad you like it! I'm made some changes - it it o.k now? Looking forward to hearing your opinion.
Love Mand xxxxxx
scribbler
Fri, 2013-08-16 15:42
yep
I figured you could revise better than I could............stan
loved
Thu, 2013-08-15 00:33
perhaps
you could let the moon
still remain solid rather than become liquid
and scent
the sent breeze
up here winds are cold
they make all sneeze
loved
mand
Fri, 2013-08-16 07:45
Hi Loved
Glad to have you come by - I heard what you were saying. I hope the changes make it better.
Thank you sooo much for your help.
( I'll try and visit you soon ).
Love Mand xxxxx
loved
Fri, 2013-08-16 13:35
thanks friend
u r welcome
loved
Rula
Thu, 2013-08-15 15:30
hello mand
A grand descriptive piece. I always adored Stan's way of describing nature, now I see he is having A new competitor and we are for sure the winners at the end.
Thanks for sharing.
I shall re-read (((in awe)))
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mand
Fri, 2013-08-16 07:48
Hello Rula
You have just given me a lovely compliment! Stan is "The man" when it comes to writing about nature!
Thanks Rula - I feel deeply encouraged.
Love and hugs
Mand xxxxxx