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As of late.
I could wax on the wings of a butterfly - but,
I ain't that kinda o' guy.
rather kick the nuts off bastard squirrels
pull the wings off blue arsed fly.
I'm the stuff that flops off dog chops
when he's up fer it and high,
I'm a metaphor to drink s'more --
I'm the toe nail in the pie.
Obi.
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Comments
Obadiah Grey
Mon, 2021-05-24 14:48
I might be, Mark. getting
I might be, Mark. getting there.
obi.
Triskelion
Mon, 2021-05-24 14:28
Jiminy Hoo-hah
I love this, and my eyes teared up a little, but couldn't help but entertain a first line like
"I could wax on the back of a blue-arsed fly" lol!
That could be a real gem with a little work.
Toe nail in the pie...unbelievable
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood
Obadiah Grey
Mon, 2021-05-24 14:53
I could be picking you pocket
I could be picking you pocket with that one, Tom.
I'm not averse to a liddle cutpurse..
Obi.
Triskelion
Mon, 2021-05-24 15:18
Be my guest
...I'd never have thought it up without reading that.
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood
lovedly
Mon, 2021-05-24 14:38
you are so metaphorical
you have made me hysterical
lol
what fun and lovely pun
well in the doing done
length why did you shun
show longer one man
O you are not yet GREY/GRAY
anyway you'd metaphorically say
(w)hoooo ray#
how many$$$$$$
today
Obadiah Grey
Mon, 2021-05-24 14:55
I'm blowing you a kiss as we
I'm blowing you a kiss as we speak, metaphorically that is !!
Obi.
lovedly
Mon, 2021-05-24 16:04
i hope u know
what metaphor is
B L O W
below
lol
o bee
Geezer
Tue, 2021-05-25 08:54
I'm all about...
splashing the audience with a little water on the way back from the washroom, in hopes of getting a little laugh.
[Did he wash his hands?] LoL. A fun little ditty! ~ Geez.
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Obadiah Grey
Wed, 2021-05-26 11:51
Haa Ha,, Great witty retort,
Haa Ha,, Great witty retort, and, yes! there are un-flushable solids to follow, Gee.
Obi.