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As of late.

I could wax on the wings of a butterfly - but,
I ain't that kinda o' guy.
rather kick the nuts off bastard squirrels
pull the wings off blue arsed fly.

I'm the stuff that flops off dog chops
when he's up fer it and high,
I'm a metaphor to drink s'more --

I'm the toe nail in the pie.

Obi.

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Toenail in the pie lmao
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I might be, Mark. getting there.

obi.

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I love this, and my eyes teared up a little, but couldn't help but entertain a first line like
"I could wax on the back of a blue-arsed fly" lol!
That could be a real gem with a little work.
Toe nail in the pie...unbelievable

Thomas

....so like my lost dreams...the flood

I could be picking you pocket with that one, Tom.
I'm not averse to a liddle cutpurse..

Obi.

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...I'd never have thought it up without reading that.

Thomas

....so like my lost dreams...the flood

you have made me hysterical
lol
what fun and lovely pun
well in the doing done
length why did you shun
show longer one man
O you are not yet GREY/GRAY
anyway you'd metaphorically say
(w)hoooo ray#
how many$$$$$$
today

I'm blowing you a kiss as we speak, metaphorically that is !!

Obi.

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what metaphor is
B L O W
below
lol
o bee

splashing the audience with a little water on the way back from the washroom, in hopes of getting a little laugh.
[Did he wash his hands?] LoL. A fun little ditty! ~ Geez.
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Haa Ha,, Great witty retort, and, yes! there are un-flushable solids to follow, Gee.

Obi.

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