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Feel Up

“I feel quite down.”
My best friend said wearing a frown
So I fixed up a coffee cup
Then I told him “ try to feel up!”

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I got the idea for this poem form shel Silverstein’s falling up.
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Telling a person who is feeling down is like telling someone to grow back a leg.

Unless it was a lewd suggestion [grins]

Then again perhaps there is something zen here.
Did you sit quietly before him, patiently repairing a broken cup, in the process enhancing its beauty with its flaws?

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it's lewd...that's why it's good/funny lol

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