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The Negro Speaks Of Rivers by Langston Hughes(Stan's Imagery WS)
I've known rivers
I've known rivers ancient path,.wilder and longer than the
flow of the blood in my veins.
My soul has grown strong like the rivers.
I used to swim in the Euphrates when the days were young.
I built my house near the Congo and it took me awhile to find sleep
I looked upon the west and raised the pyramids of hope
I heard the song of the Mississippi when Abraham Lincoln
went sailing to New Orleans, and I've seen its clear
bosum turn to gold in the sunset.
I've known rivers
Ancient., dusky rivers
My soul has grown strong like the rivers
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the original assignment from Stan
I've known rivers ancient ..... ..... ........... and......... than the
flow of ........ blood in ........... veins.
My soul has ..... ..... like the rivers.
I.... in the Euphrates when .......... were young.
I built my ..... near the Congo and it ..... me.... to... sleep
I looked upon the ........ and raised the pyramids .... ..
I heard the .... of the Mississippi when ........ Lincoln
went.......... to New Orleans, and I've seen its.............
bosum turn .... ..... in the sunset.
I've known rivers
............, dusky rivers
My .......... has grown ..... like the rivers
Comments
Seren
Sun, 2014-03-09 13:48
Alid
I am not sure of the problem your having on a quick look it seems you have done a splendid job, its 5am here I have to sleep but I'll be back later today with a full critique, well done on a difficult assignment.
Love Jayne x
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
alidzain
Sun, 2014-03-09 13:53
Thanks, love
nighty-nite, don't let the bedbugs bite
Alid
raj
Sun, 2014-03-09 14:38
Alid
I too feel that you have done a great job in double quick time given the degree of difficulty of the assignment...let's see how the original poem unfolds in due course of time...cheers!
raj (sublime_ocean)
alidzain
Sun, 2014-03-09 14:46
Thanks, Raj
for the visit and kind comment.
Alid
China Blue
Mon, 2014-03-10 08:43
Alid
Seems to look just fine to me. It reads very smoothly nice job
Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)
alidzain
Mon, 2014-03-10 15:18
Thanks, Chrys
To be honest, I'm actually worried when I get this assignment.
Alid
China Blue
Mon, 2014-03-10 19:45
Alid
Yes we take our writing seriously but on the other hand a workshop is there not to tell who is right or wrong but to learn from each other so please do not feel worried about anything that is done here we are here to help each other out not to point fingers so to speak. I had been away for quite some time but coming back I was greeted by this workshop and am enjoying every minute of it. As I said before it looks like you did a fine job
I wouldn't think of it as an "assignment" it is not a class room ,no one is going to grade you. it is more of an exerise in writing so relax and enjoy the ride.
Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)
raj
Tue, 2014-03-11 01:13
Hi Chrys
I wish to clarify that in my comments in the workshop threads I referred to this workshop and exercises as Class room and assignments just to give it a tinge of humor. I entirely agree with your comment above that we are here to help each other for value addition and enjoyment. So, if my comments have in any way been perceived as otherwise, I stand corrected.
raj (sublime_ocean)
alidzain
Mon, 2014-03-10 22:24
thanks, chrys
for the comment.
Alid
scribbler
Thu, 2014-03-13 12:18
just
letting you know I've dropped by. I'll await afew more comments before displaying the original
Rula
Tue, 2014-03-18 13:03
Khalid
I only found problem in using the adjective "strong" to describe the rivers in such a tender poem. I think we need to see the original though.
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alidzain
Tue, 2014-03-18 13:38
Hi Rula
you have a point. Let's wait for the original.
Alid