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You Should Sleep. I Should Do A Lot of Things.

There are times that I am not supposed to be here.

I should be sitting on your lap
Telling you about the dream I had in gym class
Or maybe just kissing you

I should be tangled in your blankets
Swimming around pillows
Trying to find you

I should be feeling something more
Than the hollow ring of the bell in me
That resembles my voice

I should be hearing your body sing
Breath passing over me
Pull in, push out

I should be learning more
Not vaguely grasping the concepts of
Ionic tendencies and their infallible stupidity

I should be sleeping
Not pining for your ghost
Clicking across the screen

I should be praying for straightforwardness
Something I lack completely
And may never want to regain

I should be sighing into you
Much too eager and
Far too willing

I should be screaming
Telling you to stop
Ripping apart all those atoms

They fucking hurt.
I thought you’d know that…
I never should be so far away.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
it's late.
Editing stage: 


wow! this is a beautiful piece.
the pure longing and yearning of a lonesome heart yearning for that one person who truly fills her, satisfies her and completes her.
Lovely Poem!

You've written the unrequited or absent love without a touch of sentimentality. Unafraid that your emotions show, you sing it out. It hurts a bit to hear it but when the hurt is real, it's an honor. Good work!


Blue Demon77

"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."

The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath

strength here! I hear the pain, see the hurt, but it's not maudlin and weepy. Nice work! ~ Gee

It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

thank you so much! you guys always make me feel significant :) my dear beau, criticism is always welcome. truth be told it WAS late and i technically wasn't allowed to have access to a word processor :P
thanks again,

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