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Unadulterated

In the quiet of my loneliness
When the stars seem far away
And the light of the moon shines brighter
Than sunlight itself
I find the peace that is you in my solitude

The shadows of darkness dissipate
In the glow of the magic you have left
My empty spaces are filled
With a light that can never be imitated
Or created by anyone else

Why is my love so cliché
The words I truly want to say
Seem to evade and only words
Which already have been said,
Pour into my love numbed head

Forgive me,
I am just a man
Of limited articulation in written verse
For I have never felt the true power
Of honest unadulterated love

All which I have known as truth
Was created to blind the eyes
Of a lonely heart
The lies of false love have been pushed away
In its stead the clarity of a true heart
Has taken its place

With great pride I shout to the world
You are the one that has opened the gates
And love has come flooding out
Like the waters of a healing river
Which I have never ever felt

I will only love you from this moment
Till the end of everlasting time
And each moment that passes
Will generate the peace
That I have finally found

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Written like a truly smitten lol. Now here I come with some alternatives
L-4 change then to than
L-13 change words to those(avoids close repeat of words)
L-18 delete the
next to last line try changing generate to add to or augment(might be closer to what you intend. As usual use or not as you see fit.......stan

Ahhh shout up! hahaha!

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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eduardo, i feel ya man...love this poem...we have similar use of imagery.

Peace love and harmony light the path we must take. - MDT

thanks for the visit and encouraging comment.

Eddie
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LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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I don't know why you state that you don't articulate, because I find your words very cohesive, coherent and eloquent. The content of this piece resonates on a subject close to my heart... my special loved one. Ilove the images you have highlighted and brought to mind. I usually quote back to the poet my favorite lines of the poem. But in this case... I loved the piece as a whole! Thanks for the great read!

always, Cat (& eddy)

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And responds, please be courteous
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I mean the cliche part of it, thanks cat as always you inspire me to continue.

Eddie
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LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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