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The balance

The Dragon
creature of fire and smoke
burning all
where ever it goes

The Butterfly
creature of flowers and sun
pollinating all
where ever it goes

it was the butterfly
who taught the dragon
how to fly

it was the dragon
who taught the butterfly
how to survive

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I tried my best to find a suggestion for improvement but came up empty. Maybe some of the free verse specialists can be of some assistance. BTW i liked this...stan

Thank you!!

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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double post

No criticism, except it too short!
But...just appreciation. Simple, direct, and deep.
Good stuff man.

Respectfully, Jim

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LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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