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Meridian

Submitted by Eduardo Cruz on Fri, 2016-05-27 00:12

What are flowers
seen through eyes
which never felt
love inside the heart

what is snow
if never white
but ashes
falling from the sky

what if love
was like a lark
flying fast
into the dark

if you never held
one and not the other
who can say how
life can have a tether

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

China Blue

Sat, 2016-06-04 17:57

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thought provoking poem I would hve enjoyed reading on but you cut it short would love to see this ex[panded a bit more What indeed

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

Eduardo Cruz

Sat, 2016-06-04 21:16

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That is all That came out of me, and you are right it did end abruptly to me too.
Unfortunately I have nothing else for this right now. Maybe a re-visit at a later time may spark something. Well we could collaborate, If you see something you can add with out change the message.
which is, "love is what keeps us alive"
Thank you so much for your comment and realizing what happen with the write!

Eddie C.

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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