lol - the beginning of this is so the perfect description of the aussie male (((rotflmao))) -
sorry to spoil the romanticims lol

oh no really i love the write and the sentiment of it... but it is sooo the epitome...

great descriptive... analogy
'My deep affection reaches for your heart sometimes
Like a birdsong from a willow
You have batted, distracted, at the delicate intention
Like a bothered youth at summer gnats'
- but you have two 'likes' here and my backbone grates at one lol

i think that i would also make
'would offer butterflies of tenderness and trust'
a new stanza
- seems to need to be as i read it

besides
'And appreciation further to embed more bonded warmth and comfort'
is an extremely long line, and i think you would get away with it more if you made the following line a new stanza

love judy
xxx

Hello,
I loved the imagery, it took me in. A very well done poem indeed. :)

My deep affection reaches for your heart sometimes

Like a birdsong from a willow

You have batted, distracted, at the delicate intention

Like a bothered youth at summer gnats


And yet there springs more sweet consideration

Tolerance, at least in time

And appreciation further to embed more bonded warmth and comfort

I would offer butterflies of tenderness and trust

Yet you would have less fragile ministrations


We may bestow less concentrated pleasantries at times

And yet in all my understanding, gathered over years

No other could quite balance the affection

With the loyalty and constancy

You gift to me
______________________
I give you a hug Anni

"My deep affection reaches for your heart sometimes

Like a birdsong from a willow"...oh how this is strongly felt.

And following gnats that annoy like a mist of unrest.
A haunting story this, with the same strong feeling throughout,
unsure and yet not, I enjoyed its form,
but i divided it as you see here,
in order to make it easier to read and digest.

Those first two lines will stay with me always. :)
Annushka.