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Sufficiently Breathless


Not one thing
can better describe

the essence of a soul's own vibe,

than what prompts a heart to quicken
like a bird's;


we've both shared
footprints shadow made

but, sunlit footprints never fade;

love leaves us breathless,
with narry a need for words.


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coudl be better formatted

Neopoet Directors this better suited for your formatting tastes?
This way i'ts a little more, elongated; ya know?

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...from the heart, or a reasonable faxcimile;
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and shake my head. I wasn't very helpful, was I? However this is a good revision in terms of edits and formatting, good job.

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