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Negativendy

Tall grass adorns the meadow
as the leaves all seem to fade,

sunshine rays help highlight
when an effort has been made.

Let not every shadow
confuse your perspective,

know inside your heart of hearts
it's all in how you live.

Ignore night's final canopy
have others do the same,

treat the light respectfully
treat it not, as if a game.

Lift high your every hopeful wish
let all your needs be known,

try and help another's plight
that's how friendships can be grown.

And down the path to the meadow fair
spend time there, be at peace,

try cultivating many smiles
so negativendy can cease.

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very telling of your climate, and geographic location. It really brings me there. Good to see you are still here on Neo as well, I miss the ol' gang.

In ink,
david

I see to have an audience and be mentioned on the www you have pulled an Esker on us by making up a word "Negativendy"
We will love and read your words without this strain on Oxford's dictionary service lol.
Great to read and a well written piece just the title needs a look at.
Take care young Doc, Yours as always, Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

When you grow the balls to write about yourself, real issues or real poetry you might become a real poet. Whenever you you use "you". the second person, you are nothing but versifying with the arrogance to think you know better than other people.

cheers,
Jess
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...it was just a fucking poem ! Since when are we not allowed to voice an opinion !?!.
Get a "grip",
Doc.

Neopoet is "newtriffic" !
...from the heart, or a reasonable faxcimile;
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You have the potential and word skills to be a bloody fine poet if you could just stop preaching! Really. Please just pause for a second when you find yourself writing in the second person and ask yourself "what makes me better than my reader?"

cheers,
Jess
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There is no obligation to make any changes however please acknowledge critique and comments.

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