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Then, Afterwards

Were l able to truly play guitar
like the masters of the art,
I'd play for you the sweetest melodies;

then afterwards, within your eyes
I'd be inspired then to write,
with that feeling flowing through me like a breeze.

I wish l better understood
the meaning of my life,
or better yet the meaning that is yours;

then afterwards, within your heart
my vision would then clear,
and l'd comfort you whilste opening your doors.

l'd like for me to really know
what attracts your eyes away,
or also what attracts them back to me;

then afterwards, within my song
you'd yearn to hear much more,
so, for forever you would hear my melody.

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Structured: Western
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i remember a greek story myth....the male enticing the female from
the land of the dead...the perilous journey and the warning to not
look back as he lulled the underworld gods with his music.....but
at the last moment in the light from darkness he looked back
and she was stolen back beneath the earth....this was a stop
action film that i saw very early...but with our storytelling in our
family and stories from books it was an introduction to the
written and cinema arts......

music so important

like a siren song
the heros tales

thank you!

....l sincerely mean it. Thank-you very much for your kindly words.
your fellow poet, & colleague;

Neopoet is "newtriffic" !
...from the heart, or a reasonable faxcimile;
david a. goodwin #{:>{)} @==

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