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Subterfuge for Loyalty?

Sometimes, my love, it's hard to understand
Exactly what God wants,
What is his plan?
When we are betrayed by acts of man

Our disillusion fogs our mind on things that matter
Our confidence is shaken as it shatters
It is easy to fall prey to our perception
Of how others may judge and their reception

But I believe, because of who you are,
The steadfastness of your principles and honor
Will not lessen you within the eyes of friends;
There support and caring goes beyond the superficial;
They will always stand beside you without pretense

Hold your head up high and remember you foundation
God is always by your side and knows of your frustration
Place all that pain and worry in the hands of the one above
And remember, greater than all else, how very much you're loved.

(c) Tonya Greenlee

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Love the poem and the feel in it

Mona Rose

This I had to learn by heart when, for a short while I had a governess, in her house I and a little boy met (we were 11yrs) and as we happened to be early for her we were set this task. Chapter one verse nine of was it the Corinthians?

"Have not I commanded thee,
be not afraid, neither be thou dismayed
for the Lord they God is with you
withersoever thou goest."

She didn't convince me of his existence,
but I never forgot her lesson!!!

I think this to be a superb poem Tonya,
yes definitely a well written poem,
from every point of view,
and it pleases me especially at Christmas,
it fits so well.

My love to you at this time from Ann in the,
in places -30-40%C its the coldest Winter

......Their support?

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

I really enjoyed this well constructed poem. Only flaw is line 13 typo you should be yours...........scribbler

hang out here and how are things going for you?


Where have you been????

Are you here now?


I was hoping she was back too, but she posted this a while back. I miss Tonya.

It is such a secret place, the land of tears. ~Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

Thank you for spotlighting another problem here on Neo.... reading for comprehension

I noted immediately the December date. However, since I had not seen this posted before, I made mention and asked if she is *here now*....Since to the best of my recollection, the new Neopoet was not yet functioning and operating in December.

According to the posts on the homepage the site was relaunchced back in October. This poem got thrown back into the site activity list because vexations commented on it. I'll have to write her on facebook when I get home and tell her to get back on here. :-D hehehe

It is such a secret place, the land of tears. ~Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

Mom we cannot loose are mentality our foundation when we try to figure out the balance of unconditional love there will never be a balance too unconditional love. There will always be betrayal even in the smallest ways with the strongest love. This is a test of your conviction, your strength in belief. To believe is one of the only things a human being can choose. So the balance is not about morality or betrayal but about who you are and what you believe in [ the test of your conviction]

Bice to have you back and such a lovely write. I felt it and immersed myself in it the whole way through

Love and miss you

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