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Scars (indirect imagery)

Red furrows plowed into the pale clay
Grow into mounds of silver stones.

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It's lovely. I am obviously missing the point of indirect imagery.

W. H. Snow

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Take red furrows, that can bring several images to mind - are they red because the soil is red? Are they red because much blood has been spilt there in the past? Has a burial mound just been ploughed - again red referring to blood. Are they red because a red tractor ploughed them? - Ok, that one is a bit tenuous.
I think you are a bit like me and tend to over think things. I could be completely wrong, but if I really get under the expression' indirect imagery', I get into conflict with imagery per se. To some extent, all imagery is both direct and indirect in my book.
Stan will qualify this, but I wonder if covert/hidden imagery would be another way of thinking of it.
I am just reflecting out loud here, forgive me if I'm barking up the wrong tree.
Jx

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I sort of hijacked your thread then.
I love the imagery in this, I can see several scenes, my favourite and not what you probably intended, is a burial mound being reconstructed after being ploughed up.
I also like the simple rural image of an old tractor, churning up all those stones and making a small mountain of them.
What was in your mind?
Jx

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When I wrote this, I was going to call it "scratches." I thought about cuts and scratches on the human body and how similar they are to the cuts and scratches in the earth made by agriculture.

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being an ex-cutter, the same images that you refer to, came to my mind. excellent work. fantastic imagery!

always, Cat

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I love that.
I was just too obtuse to see it.
Now you highlight it, it's obvious.
Jx

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the indirect imagery's job is to take the reader to different and many directions. These two lines have done this successfully. The author then has the freedom to explain his/her intention or not.

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But what do the silver stones refer to?

They are the ropes of hardened thick skin that form scars.

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I have a 16 inch scar on my leg, 2- 1 inch scars on my chin and a bunch of other scares scattered about (dang! makes it sound like I'm some kind of mercenary or something lol) But all my scars are either pink or white. lol

I have a scar on my neck from where I was impaled with a chair leg when I was three. It is white but has a silvery sheen to it in the light.

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Guess I don't spend enough time looking at my leg in direct light. Too busy looking at pretty legs I guess lmao...........stan

Quadruple bypass will do that for you. It's a big one. I also have three scars like holes where the tubes came out.

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