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Pretty Okay

Submitted by godshouldnthave on Thu, 2020-08-20 01:19

I find it slightly strange
To be only slightly wanted
By so few people
In my own home land I am mostly forgotten

I find it slightly strange
To be slightly more than wanted
By so many people
In this new land I have only just haunted

And yet I feel
So deep in my alone
And I float so
So deep into the alone

And I don't want it
This game and all it's rules
The tension of it all
And it's ocean full of fickle fools

They tell me
It's all so pretty
Pretty pretty pretty
It will all be pretty okay

But I am pretty
Pretty dead inside
And I don't feel
Pretty pretty okay?

I should have stayed
Where I was wanted
Far from my home land
Those minds now seem so stunted

It is slightly strange
To be more than slightly unwanted
By the house that built you
My makers now confronted

I don't want it
Their game and all it's rules
The pretension of it all
And it's ocean tide of trite tools

Cuz I am pretty
Pretty much afraid to stay
I hope my soul will pass on
And be pretty okay

But it wont all be pretty
I will still be long gone
But now I am pretty okay
With not being born

And again I feel
So deep in my alone
And I float so
So deep into the alone

I am pretty okay
It will be pretty okay
I am pretty okay
Am I pretty?
Pretty okay?

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Sat, 2020-08-22 13:56

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this to be haunted by so many thoughts of inadquacies, that I thought maybe it was just a foolish write and didn't deserve a comment. However, after reading it numerous imes, I began to see; that there is much more to it than that. I went to your profile to see where you came from and maybe find out something more about you. Imagine my disappointment at finding that you have not given any details about who, what, and where you are from. BUT, I did find that you had been here before and engaged some of my fellow poets and mentors while I had been gone from the site. Jess and Stephan are both gone now and I miss them greatly. You have written some great arguments for and about your work and I applaud your sense of self-worth. If you have read any of my work, you have not been sufficiently impressed or interested that you have commented. No matter. It is I, who wanted to comment on yours. Thank you for your return to Neo. although I fear that you will not get the kind of responses that you recieved from Jess and Stephan, I do hope that you will continue to post here. Who knows, maybe there are some here that will be worthy of engaging you in your quest for answers. Good luck. ~ Geezer.
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