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Peanut Butter and Grape Koolaid

Peanut Butter and Grape Kool aid

Cool breeze from the fan
Is too cold for my skin
My body starts to ache

News reports from my laptop
Debt ceiling, shutdown, Obama care
Is all reporters talk about

In this dark dim room
Glowing red
From my black mini lamp

My first granddaughter
Sits by my side
Her head rests on my breast

Few minutes earlier
She was hyperactive
Playing Beyoncé on my iPad

My four feet walking cane
As if a microphone
She sings "1+1"

Running back and forth to the refrigerator
She begs for peanut butter
To go with her grape Kool aid

Saddened by her grandad's word
No!
She sleeps in my arms

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a precious moment in time indeed. nicely painted.

Thanks for posting

Scott

Scott

I'm practicing on showing my poetry instead of telling it. Saying its 'Nicely painted' gives me confidence that I did okay. Thanks for commenting and sharing.

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Very nice! You have captured a cherished moment - which tells a story - not only about your family relationships but about modern life as we know it!

Loved it! for that reason.

Love Mand xxxx

I wanted to practice showing the moment instead of telling about it the moment. My intent was to capture the reader attention and keep them wanting more.
Storytelling is a talent I fall short at.
Thanks for reading and sharing.

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and like all it's simplicity gripped me.
Kool aid? I couldn't find it in dictionaries.Please forgive my ignorance.

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It's koolaid, one word. spell check got mind of its own lol. thanks for reading and sharing

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