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At our age (OCTOBER 1)

We ought to be patriotic
We all obliged to be one.
despite our different tunes
we pledged to unites.
Peace, Love and Faith
we yelled and yelled
in strength and power.

We have what it takes
in assurance we called freedom.
Militarily the voyage began.
The solemnity song changed
as we crossed blood rivers

At our age! What can we call ours?
At our age! Where are we?
At our age! the birds are singing
back or forth,left or right.
At our age! Corruption our DNA.
At our age! Where is our hope?
At our age! save our nation o' God.

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Structured: Western
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Last few words: 
been patriotism to our nation we suppose to have develop to biggest and organise country by now, But we lake patriotism, love, faith and even peace that is why we are now the most poorest nation on earth, despite our resources in abundance. These are what this poem is portraying.
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your profound pride for your nation as too your sentiments can be sensed in these verses....

raj (sublime_ocean)

Long time,
I know for sure that people of all kinds except few hats truth that's why see it as sentiment and a profound pride but you surprise me for seen it that way

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question's that Nigerian's have to answer
I also love this word here 'as we crossed blood river'
such an evocative poem

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

Thanks for ur comment

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