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The charros.

Oh mother who conceived
holily and just as promised
by the mighty of heaven
behold the queen has put to birth
the king of devine mercy
halleluia, halleluia
praises fill the universe
joy fill unto the living

Hosannah, hosannah
the king of peace
all hail the king
all hail the king of glory
the king of redemption
the king arose other kings
the Chariot king of kings
he who comes in the name of lord
he who comes for the sins
he who enkindle the world

for all the living rejoices
the birds sings the inserts whistle
the animals cries aloud
men and women sings
praises and worships
for his birth is sanctified
marked as holy feast
the king whom nothing's compere

Chrissy the king
fill with melodious spirit
spicy rhythms and taste
rhymes and hymns in lyrics
steps and dances like David 's
stay awake night and night long
celebrating the king above all
he is the way, light and truth.

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Hello, Simon,
A tender poem of adoration, praise, and homage. The third stanza is especially moving. I'm curious and I'd love to understand more about the title.
Thank you!
L

for all the living rejoices
the birds sings the inserts whistle
the animals cries aloud
men and women sings
praises and worships
for his birth is sanctified
marked as holy feast
the king whom nothing's compere

It means when Jesus Christ the king was born every living thing we're extremely happy, and all kings or powers must submit to him. Thank you for your comment and happy Christmas in advance.

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A very Happy Christmas to you, too.
L

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