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Bad egg in the basket

A throne has been built
by the poor of this land
in one accord they uplifted one
as a head
beneath his feet they thramble
around him they all gathered
looking up to him for provision and protection
but in return he feeds them with fear and tears,
pain and affliction,
death and sorrow.

wearing the crown of brutality on his head
like the scavenger
a crown been washed in the blood of vengeance and hatred
yet, resting his feet on the back of those
who seek justice.

voices arising for questioning
what kind are you?
a king without wisdom is like an empty vessel
for a wise king roars the voice of justice and truth and the bad egg be removed from the basket.

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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This is about the felling governments in nigeria and africa as a continent.
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before I reached the section of (Last few words) i guessed this was what your poem was about. I like your title, it is imaginative. your poem suggests the insanity of a really bad man. my favorite lines are:

voices arising for questioning
what kind are you?
a king without wisdom is like an empty vessel
for a wise king roars the voice of justice and truth and the bad egg be removed from the basket.
(and then kick him away, lol!
a great read.

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