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NO LOVE FOR LOVE

I shall go quietly
albeit with my chains -
released into the ethers
without pleasure, without pain

Dissociative dimness,
numbs the mind.
Indifference is Nature's way
of release, from the unkind.

No love for love
given freely over time.
No pity for this fool
who's passion proved the only crime.

14 April 13

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A lovely write and I hope fiction, but this still was from some recess of the mind that fears something, maybe being alone.
Not really sure what to say to that feeling it is alien to me, but as only one of my four biological children remembered my Birthday, I seem to know what you are feeling in the write lol.
I have more children here though, and I had about twenty Cards a few presents and two lovely meals out of being one year older lol.
Take care out there, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Its wonderful to read you again I loved your poem I cant think of anything that needs changing, great write keep em coming

love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

Thank you - nice to be back and have commentary from the likes of you both! ;)
Ian:
"some recess of the mind"
Indeed - isnt' most creative material sporned in that fashion? truth is stranger than fiction, and yes, this is based on the former...
" that fears something, maybe being alone."
Again, isn't that often the most blatant fear after the break up of a relationship?
Good that you could hit the nail on the head so succinctly and accurately!
In your case, don't think you are in any way "a fool for love" viz-a-viz your children Ian. Isn't it just that everyone's lives are so busy and frenetic? Then again, you were remembered and your birthday celebrated by so many others so - a belated birthday from me to! :)
Regards
Boni

Bonitaj

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Thank you for your birthday wishes.
the best way is to learn in truth .
To accept the truth without malice is a truth
To live your life as you will you learn is truth.
Boni, You will never be alone, there are 7 billion people out there, and you have many good ones to meet and maybe cry a tear over but it is only for you to learn,
Yours, here as always Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

A beautiful, melancholy poem that recalls an actor walking down stage as it fades to black

Joe

My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.

Thank you for your words of critique and encouragement!
Regards

Bonitaj

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