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ENSCONSED

Submitted by Bonitaj on Wed, 2013-04-17 04:05

Satin hand in velvet glove
Belly to buttocks, bodies enfurled.
Touching lugano- like softest fuzz
Bodies infused,
By this sublime love.

She repeats each word, before it's said.
Internalized and well rehearsed
Silently whispering:
"I know you better,
than what's in my head".

Exalted in the nakedness of Being
abandoned in moments
Not wanton, but wanting
no more than this
Spent feeling.

The merger of minds
The sharing of seeing
The ultimate way to give to Life
More Joy,
More meaning.

17 April,13

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Review Request (Direction):

What did you think of my title?

How does this theme appeal to you?

Is the internal logic consistent?

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

Wed, 2013-04-17 09:19

Seren's picture

Boni

You have ticked all the boxes in my opinion the only thing I could say was I am not fond of the title it just doesnt fit(excuse the pun)

give me a nights sleep and if you like I could make a few suggestions for the title

a really good write I thoroughly enjoyed the read

love JC x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Wed, 2013-04-17 13:55

Bonitaj's picture

Thanks JC!

Hadn't really thought much of it, but made an attempt to tie in with the theme... See if you can come up with something else/better perhaps....
Cheers
Boni

Bonitaj

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