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A New Life

We thought that moving to a place

with springs, grass-field and butterflies

would make it better for us, but it was all vanity;

like in the city when we were complaining about overdue bills,

traffic, noise and lack of privacy,

we are now polluting this serene place

with our petty fights.

If it is possible to move to heaven right now,

I think God would kick us back to this blue ball……..

Honey, I think it’s time that we change our attitude

towards each other, and rekindle our passionate love,

rather than moving from one place to another.

Source: A New Life - Change Poems, Life Poems, True Love Poems

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I like the message and simplicity of this one!

Its honest, concise, clear and easy to understand - which is what is appealing about it.

Well done.

Love Mand xxx

I have read more positive poems today than all month previous.

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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