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OF THE LOST WORD

Submitted by t. reflexion on Thu, 2012-12-20 18:16

Silent wind carried away the lost word
Not written ever since it was uttered
Ricochet reflected in conception

The word took form in myriad realities
Expressing an endless order within
Of an unending cycles of reunion

This obscure word, not heard by man ever
Remains a puzzle in a ceaseless search
Set to undo that which had been designed

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Ian.T

Tue, 2013-01-08 02:38

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This I think is one of your best pieces, a cry for such a word to be used and concealed nevertheless in your short poem.
We need more of this type of feelings to come out in your words..
The historical ones can be put into a separate book, as I have said before,
Yours Ian.T

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