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A hanged about monkey was almost caught
Lost its tail in the precarious moment
Suggested others should cut their tails too
To thwart efforts of their subjugators

It was so on a Sunday afternoon
I drove into a road covered with flood
A woman whose car conked out right in
Called out that I should switch my engine off

If I’d listened to the redolent voice
With water into the exhaust conduit
The auto would not have started again
Like her, paid Area-boys to push me out

Do not listen to the envious monkey
The tongue of a rogue is full of deceits
The enticer has many tricks in store
The ultimate option remains with you

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An old saying about the monkey re-occuring in real live situation. We get advice from people, and if we follow such advice, get a negative result because either it was intentionally meant to deceive us or it came out of ignorance, like a blind man leading another blind man. Thank you for the comments and best wishes.


A rekindled faith - Dancing in the Light

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we have crossed paths
one blind monkey says to me
follow me and i
both deaf and dumb


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