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Light Our Path Ahead

Into a new dark age
we go, marching,
careening headlong

[of soapbox poetry
there is no want
for many a voice
loudly rail and rant]

the terrain of our
condition and that
of our experience
has changed over
year upon year of
progress that has brought
us closer to the edge
of a generation that
lives on the horizon

itself

peering further on

beyond

to challenges invisible
to our yet untrained minds

so a new era begins
pioneering unexplored
vastnesses and
before unrecognised
darknesses

while on the remotest reaches
bright lights we have yet

to define and harness
beckon
to our whetted appetite
for tomorrows.

[Into itself, beyond vast darkness, remote lights beckon our tomorrows.]

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welcome back
after a long abstention...
was it on purpose
to produce....
you know what I mean

your friend loved

loved

No. It was two main things,
Computers crashing &
Emotions dashing..
It was a year that was beyond blue
The dark of a mind's night is that hue.

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'Break, break break on thy cold grey stones, O Sea.'

author comment

I suspect there could be some minor edits, and forgive me if I forget to come back and suggest them, but read it aloud to yourself and see what you can come up with.

cheers,
Jess
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