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Light Our Path Ahead

Into a new dark age
we go, marching,
careening headlong

[of soapbox poetry
there is no want
for many a voice
loudly rail and rant]

the terrain of our
condition and that
of our experience
has changed over
year upon year of
progress that has brought
us closer to the edge
of a generation that
lives on the horizon


peering further on


to challenges invisible
to our yet untrained minds

so a new era begins
pioneering unexplored
vastnesses and
before unrecognised

while on the remotest reaches
bright lights we have yet

to define and harness
to our whetted appetite
for tomorrows.

[Into itself, beyond vast darkness, remote lights beckon our tomorrows.]


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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage: 


welcome back
after a long abstention...
was it on purpose
to produce....
you know what I mean

your friend loved


No. It was two main things,
Computers crashing &
Emotions dashing..
It was a year that was beyond blue
The dark of a mind's night is that hue.

'write on! let these words free.'

author comment

I suspect there could be some minor edits, and forgive me if I forget to come back and suggest them, but read it aloud to yourself and see what you can come up with.

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