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JUSTICE

Crime has many eyes
Wings but can't fly
Long as snake
bites itself often
Has extended family
And through the generations--distant relatives

Justice sees no sound
Hears no insight
The thorn amidst the crop
Because what's "a lion without tooth
Tree without root
Lie without truth?"---justice.

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The crimes been committed in societies now is too much and it seems some governments are not addressing it properly,which means there is so much conspiracy but the day of justice shall arrive sooner or later.
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very good writing you have her waiting for,
"Justice sees no sound
Hears no insight
The thorn amidst the crop",
potsherd

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your hunger for humanity to be free from the abuse of power. I don't think that there is one answer to the lifting and saving of people under the rule of tyrants. I liked the simile of crime to a snake and the way that crime has generations and extended family. Did you mean [wings] instead of winds?
I really think I got the thought behind the theme. ~ Geezer.
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Actually it's suppose to be (wings) but it is mistake of a finger touch thanks for your observation.

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a nice two part poem. crime/justice. a long snake that bites itself is a clever image. I especially like the final rhymes, "what's a lion without tooth, tree without root, lie without truth?"

Thanks for liking this poem I pray that justice is done at the end.

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I got some good emotive reaction from those first few lines, you came at the concept in a different way than I would have , & that is often a great thing... Loved the imagery of. "long as a snake, bites itself often" & also the way the following line made me explore my own understanding/perspective of crime.

Good job

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