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I'll try this again

Don't expect a clever rhyme
or any big adjectives
or an attempt
at perfect structure

That comes in a song
or someone else's

I simply type a line
and then another
they don't mesh
together all that well
the subject matter
isn't overly deep
or profound

And I don't worry
about proper punctuation
or make a conscious effort
regarding rhythm
or pacing
or alliteration

It's just a poem
And a poet laureate
I am not
So I'll keep
it as brief
as possible

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I like your style and approach, always interesting little bits and insights of somethings that might be considered mundane, even obvious, but your slant and take are always unique enough to make your observations worthy of being written. Always enjoyable to read


In writing a poem about not trying to write a good one, you wrote a good one...........scribbler

Oh, I do love it so . . .

This one made me smile~! We both get points.


"When a pickpocket meets a holy man all he sees are his pockets."

Unknown (at least to me)

Hmmm. Seems to me that you're saying poetry is not obviously oblivious to subtlety.

I wonder what you mean by that? lol.


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