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Just friends

Lately this just friends 
Thing seems  more like a one 
way street than any kind
Of friendly relationship 

one can't help wonder
if you wouldn't feel better
just doing your own thing

Does a person really
need that many
Friends anyway .....
Just a few good friends
that should be sufficient
But we all have some
want or need to be liked

some friends can be
A burdensome dissapointment
at times
And a drain on ones energy.. ....
Which, I don't  have all that much of
and time....
Extra time and/or energy

And ... 
Things always get complicated......
Like when
Phone calls get dropped
At the most inconvenient
Moments
left hanging ........
wondering and somewhat frustrated ......

Then the conversation can shift to texting ......  OMG .......
Text messages just tend
To aggravate instead of inform

It can be sadly wearing -I get tired ............

Then.... 
More and more frequently 
These fucked up moodswings
Come on so suddenly.
And .........
They can recede slowly ....... unevenly......
Or linger ...........................
Like an soggy damp overcast
Morning that turns into
A gloomy overcast cold dark 
Endless rainy night

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Comments

I cant see anything that needs to be changed, its well crafted ... it sounds like someone really depressed with their life ... its a depressing read dont know if that was your intention but it is

I will read some of your other work tomorrow maybe its just me ? lol

kindest regards Jayne-Chloe

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