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I'll try this again
Don't expect a clever rhyme
or any big adjectives
or an attempt
at perfect structure
That comes in a song
or someone else's
poem
I simply type a line
and then another
they don't mesh
together all that well
the subject matter
isn't overly deep
or profound
And I don't worry
about proper punctuation
or make a conscious effort
regarding rhythm
or pacing
or alliteration
It's just a poem
And a poet laureate
I am not
So I'll keep
it as brief
as possible
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What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
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Comments
brittle light
Tue, 2010-12-14 16:58
I like your style and
I like your style and approach, always interesting little bits and insights of somethings that might be considered mundane, even obvious, but your slant and take are always unique enough to make your observations worthy of being written. Always enjoyable to read
Al
scribbler
Tue, 2010-12-14 17:57
again
In writing a poem about not trying to write a good one, you wrote a good one...........scribbler
Victorclaude
Sun, 2010-12-19 13:31
Oh, I do love it so . . .
Oh, I do love it so . . .
This one made me smile~! We both get points.
Victor
"When a pickpocket meets a holy man all he sees are his pockets."
Unknown (at least to me)
Kailashana2
Sun, 2010-12-19 13:36
Hmmm. Seems to me that you
Hmmm. Seems to me that you're saying poetry is not obviously oblivious to subtlety.
I wonder what you mean by that? lol.
~Anna