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I am borderline

Submitted by The Eccentric poet on Thu, 2021-10-07 07:01

I am a bottomless pit of needing,
A whirling torrent of over feeling,
The hellish hunger that goes unfed,
Pain and anger that never ebbs.
I am a vampire for your affection,
A martyr made from past rejection.

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Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
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I don't think this poem is finished but I wrote it the other day after one of my meltdowns
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Editing - rough draft
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Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Thu, 2021-10-07 10:41

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I would consider this poem finished, there doesn't seem to be anymore to say. I like the use of the sound-alike [fed] and [ebb].
I get the meaning behind the title and unless it becomes a mode of life; I wouldn't be concerned about it. Be kind to yourself
and give yourself the same affection that you are asking from others. ~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place

Candlewitch

Mon, 2022-02-28 11:50

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oh yeah!!! I really, really love this poem! it goes right down to the bone! you are an inspiration!!!

*hugs, Cat

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The Eccentric poet

Tue, 2022-03-01 14:19

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Thankyou im glad you enjoyed it

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