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It seems I'm incapable of dying or living,
Fought the lies, now back at the beginning.
In pain in the present, head stuck in the past,
Still endlessly hoping the torment will not last.

Sleepless nights follow lonesome, empty days
still trying to stand by the promises we made.
I miss you, but wonder if we are still the same,
Words so full of hate, battles so full of blame.

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Just something I put together when I couldn't sleep
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1. Structure and Flow: Consider organizing your poem into stanzas to enhance the flow and readability. Stanzas can help create a sense of rhythm and structure within the poem.

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