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Emotional Eruptions

every time i think 
we are cool
you say the meanest things
you make my cry out
in classic blues
of a busted heart

you must know and time
my change of attitude
when you are nice to me
with a drop of nastiness
to make me aware
of your long standing
disguise rsentment
so well in you peace offerings

oh you are so clever
waiting for me to complain 
about things you know i hate
while pretending to be unaware
of things i find annoying

but that's okay
i'll keep it to myself
pretend i didn't notice
as you push buttons
just to get a rise out of me
it didn't work this time
my time has been set

sustaining blows 
from your tongue, sharp
as a two edge sword
has me wondering
if this is all life has to offer
in love and war
straight forward into the core 
of my heart
still seeping blood
from your last blow

I'm pinned to the wall
in this prison 
you have carved for me

the moment my feet
hit the sand
rising from the raging
sea of emotions
you create in me
to destroy my happiness
and sap my joy
has begun to swallow
me whole

here you come again and again
with the those big feet
staring me in the face
just before i'm slam backyard
into another wave of tsunami 
like emotions

stay away from me
can you at least allow my heart
to recuperate
for a least a moment
from the earthquakes
shifting in my bones

give me just a moment of peace
from the red hot lava
boiling in my veins

I'm trying hard not to erupt
spewing nasty magna 
all over your face
then watching 
you melt like the wicked witch
from the wizard of oz

it does me no good
to act like a fool
while you act like
a victim of circumstance
attempting to blind
the eyes and minds
of outsiders
wondering saying
what?
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sustaining blows
from your tongue, sharp
as a two edge sword
has me wondering
if this is all life has to offer
in love and war
straight forward into the core
of my heart
still seeping blood
from your last blow

your poem reminds me of an old boyfriend... I was relieved to be rid of the relationship. What on earth posesses people to behave that callously and badly? It is beyond me.

always, Cat

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it is beyond my understanding too. especially when they cant see pass their own self interest.

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Yes it is such a pity that a lot of people cannot see beyond their own needs, especially when those needs are self centred, if only we could teach that it is the inner self that is there, it is just wrapped up in a differing way..
All the major teachers in the world have said at some time, Treat your companion as you would be treated and all those that you meet.
In my life I suppose I have been spoilt but from where???
I think that my whole life's acceptance of others is due to my Father and Mother and a loving family upbringing. I left home at 15... WHY I ask myself this always..
I married at 21 raised a family of four children been through a divorce after 37 years, remarried, been to many countries, been in war zones and many of life's things that test you along the way, but all in all I have retained an inner peace that a chance encounter gave to me several years ago,(That's another story) 34 years and three months ago but never tell anyone shush..
Now i am in a Spiritual place and quiet, though this is when I am at my most fidgety, but at my now age I shall not be moved.
You two have an inner beauty, as does all people, just be sure to tend it with love, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

thanks your words are so true. and so are your words of encouragement.

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Leaps and bounds you have made.
This is great work here.
I felt the sting and

the release!!

LOL

God Bless!
Mona

one suggestion
'resentment you disguised' - i would keep it in the present tense to fit the rest of the write
ie 'resentment you disguise'

lol - why does one stay in an unsuitable relationship?
habits are hard to break - that's why they are called habits... but we are better off without them when we make the effort (hard as it may be)

love judy
xxx

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shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
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appreciate the commentary.

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop* American Version of Japanese Poetry ~ Renga ~ Haiku, Senyru, Tanka.

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