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Dreams and Nonsensible Things

To waste your time
To maybe just lie there for a while
Let your breath do the talking
Against my chest, deep and slow
My recurring dream every night
My only wish every morning
Uncomplicated
So surreal
Untouchable

To be perfect
To make the pieces fit
To make it all work out
To fix your skin
Make it all worthwhile
To be simple
I try so hard sometimes
At all the wrong times
To keep it in and shut it up
And lock it tight
When I know it’s all you want to see

Is it possible
To love you with a half broken heart?
Well, I’ll just have to try it
I’ll take your stitches and your rings
All your pretty stares and smiles
And all the things you try to tell me
Until you touch me
You know I’ll never believe it

You spill over the margins
And the paper doesn’t fit
So it’s written on my skin
In a thousand different places
A thousand different colors
But only in your hand
Butterfly hearts and I love you’s

Now midnight and a half
It’s late
I’m still awake
It’s raining tiny pieces of my soul
And you’re falling from the sky
And what am I doing?
Standing outside
With my tongue sticking out
My heart split, wide open
Trying to catch you.

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Last few words: 
i don't even know. the soul thing is a joke about hail, by the by. in case you were wondering :)
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just marvelous...
the title was what compelled me to click on your poem, I think the use of imagery was great, each word depicted scenes in my mind, and theme, it appeals to me on a very deep level as i find i share some notions expressed in the poem and thats what touched me. Thanks for sharing.

Peace love and harmony light the path we must take. - MDT

i try to make titles as exciting as possible. i think a good title adds to the work. thanks so much, it's great to hear that someone can relate to my work :)
mag

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