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December
It’s December and you ask me about love;
And it’s funny because this time last year we were both necks deep in it.
I tell you I dabble, here and there,
a touch, a glance, a fling.
a rendezvous with a dark man in a dark blue truck.
I tell you that I’m scared I won’t be treated right again.
“Again?” you ask
“Yes.” I say.
you beg me to elaborate and I do,
I could never say no to you.
I weave you a tale of your own idiocy and wrap it up in shiny gold streamer.
I run the ribbon along my fingernails like they are scissors, because they are just as sharp
and I watch it curl up exactly the way my hair does on a Tuesday afternoon when it is raining outside and I have no one to show.
I tie it off and finish it with a label, addressed to you,
stamped with a shiny seal and a sorry excuse.
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Thu, 2024-01-04 04:00
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Geezer
Thu, 2024-01-04 12:27
Sometimes...
we need to have those little conversations with ourselves.
Of course, I may have it all wrong, but even so, I see nothing here that I would change.
~ Geezer.
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MermaidMaster
Thu, 2024-01-11 22:49
thank you!!!!
thank you!!!!
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author commentCandlewitch
Fri, 2024-01-12 07:54
hello,
Are you new to Neopoet? If you are, I hope that you are feeling welcome and enjoying the site. This is the first that I have come across a poem of yours. I much enjoyed reading. It is very descriptive with great language usage! My favorite lines are:
I weave you a tale of your own idiocy and wrap it up in shiny gold streamer.
I run the ribbon along my fingernails like they are scissors, because they are just as sharp
and I watch it curl up exactly the way my hair does on a Tuesday afternoon when it is raining outside and I have no one to show
But I have to tell you; I found it difficult to choose, as the poem, on a whole is rich with likeable material...I look forward to you reading my poems and commenting!
*hugs, Cat
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MermaidMaster
Fri, 2024-01-12 12:01
hello! I appreciate your
hello! I appreciate your comment!! I am a little new and I do feel very welcome!! I look forward to reading your poems as well :)
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