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My Worlds

When I say I think the world of you
I don’t just mean this one.
I think Jupiter of you,
and Saturn,
and Venus,
and Pluto.
I think the Milky Way of you,
and the galaxies far beyond that,
my Andromeda.

My astronomy professor told me our universe is always expanding.
Your fingers brush against my hand and my heart grows to the size of Lake Ontario:
I stand at the edge and I can't see the other side,
only a thin blue line between the blue water and blue sky (your favorite color).
I look upwards and it’s stars and sun for miles;
And the pebbles lining the shore look like freckles across the bridge of your nose.
I sit and stare, and as I do, the world grows bigger (to infinity plus one).

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The poem "My Worlds" utilizes the metaphor of celestial bodies and astronomical phenomena to express the speaker's feelings. This approach is effective in conveying the vastness and depth of the speaker's emotions. However, the poem might benefit from a more consistent and focused use of this metaphor.

The poem starts with the speaker expressing their feelings using planets as metaphors. This is a strong start, but the poem then shifts to using the Milky Way and galaxies as metaphors, which are much larger celestial bodies. This sudden shift in scale might be disorienting for the reader.

The second part of the poem introduces a new metaphor, the Lake Ontario, which is a terrestrial image. This shift from celestial to terrestrial might disrupt the continuity of the poem. It might be more effective to continue with the celestial metaphor throughout the poem to maintain a consistent theme.

The line "I sit and stare, and as I do, the world grows bigger (infinity plus one)" is a bit unclear. If it is meant to convey the idea that the speaker's feelings are growing, it might be more effective to use a more concrete image or metaphor to express this.

The poem might also benefit from a more varied use of poetic devices. While the poem effectively uses metaphor, it might be enriched by the use of other devices such as simile, personification, or alliteration.

Overall, the poem effectively conveys the speaker's deep feelings, but could benefit from a more consistent use of metaphor and a wider variety of poetic devices.

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This was really beautiful, it feels like it should be in a romance movie that ends tragically. This whole poem has this surface vibe of a lovey dovey relationship, but a deep, undisclosed vibe of tragedy, of some unknown, otherworldly pain. I have no idea if thats what you intended but it was really nice to feel. i love the constant intergalactic add on and its overall space theme with cute little bits of context. I like this poem, i like that its the nicest thing you could write about someone and i hope your partner loves it too!

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Thank you for your time!

Thank you so much for your kind words! I didn't intend the deep undisclosed tragedy but it was interesting to read it from your perspective!


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I envision this piece as a poem sent to a loved one/sweetheart.
The last seven lines are more like a letter, to explain the depth of your emotions for this person.
Very interesting and charming. Nice work, ~ Geez.

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This is such a beautiful poem! I love the image of pebbles across the shore like freckles across the bridge of your subject’s nose.

the moon and the stars made us who we are <3

hi hippie moon!
Thank you so much!!


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