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Date Night End In Murder

There is a lot that's going on
My wifi is off, car is down
I purchase one day of wifi
And a rental, Nissan Sentra

Watching another murder case
There is a lot that's going on
This man is a real life monster
He killed his wife who loved him so.

He shot her close range in the head
Then put a bullet in her heart
There is a lot that's going on
I can't imagine this evil.

He's a cold hearted murderer
He threw her out the driver's door
Then backed up and ran her over
There is a lot that's going on.
*
He was abusive from the start
Her family, friends pleaded with her
Not to take this disastrous leap
But she married him anyway.

She a working mom with five girls
He was abusive from the start
A hairstylist, helping others
She planned date nights with her husband.

It made no sense, he beat her so
Two young teens witness him choke her
He was abusive from the start
Pinned against the wall, feet dangling.

Her friend asked, "why you stay with him"?
"I love him" she would dearly say
She was tall, slim, pretty, lighted skinned
He was abusive from the start.
*
A fools love end in tragedy
A small, short, dark-skinned, ugly dude
Looks just like his heart-stricken dad
Telling jury his son did it.

He told his father he shot her
A fool's love end in tragedy
He claimed it was a accident
Killed cousin same way years before.

He's no regrets for his action
Telling court he was innocent
A fool's love end in tragedy
Friend witnessed him get in her car.

Witness said he reached under seat
Watched him put something in his shirt
She said she thought it was a gun
A fool's love end in tragedy.

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I don't envy you at all. A scene that absolutely no one would like to witness.
Take care dear.

a typo, fools.....[fool's]?

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I didn't witness this. Thank God. Lol. I watched a documentary about a murder case that was sickening. Thought it a good idea to write this experience in poetry.

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You have made not just one but multiple quatrains in this single post which is remarkable...

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raj (sublime_ocean)

Thanks. I thought it a good idea to write it in quartern. But realize as I was writing that three seperate Quartern would make it work. Glad you like it. Though gruesome snd horrible as it is.

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every second of every day
I wonder if without the evil desperation and emptiness
the light of the loving would be diminished.
I have been told I am wrong by my sister
and I tell her I do not seek to rationalise or excuse,
but to cope through understanding how the hell this can be.
I survive in the balance.
I always appreciate my internet connection more
when it's recently been torn from my spiralling eyeballs
and my soul

Not having my internet feels as horrible as this sad poem. Lol. I'm as you are with life "I do not seek to rationalise or excuse,
but to cope through understanding how the hell this can be.
I survive in the balance.
I always appreciate my internet connection more
when it's recently been torn from my spiralling eyeballs
and my soul" lol

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This is what happens when we figured out a form and gently abuse it.
Good and fun poetry (okay, a little gruesome).

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I'm glad you find it a blast. "Gently abuse?" I think it's ingenious figuring out how to tell an entire story in Quatern. It wasn't a easy task. I figured it out as I was writing

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wow..what a poem..all too much gruesomely
a trend...
what did she see in all of that..
not the obvious..
I think of all the fairytales..the ones
we read from the books that were
not the commercialized weird sucesses
that Disney made colorized and
wonderful

or the bible stories full of niceness
there were many that all came to
some kind of horrid ending

I too like this form of poetry
and I find lately your writing
is zooming along
as I said before...the south with
its flavorful depth and darkness
the slow temp and great heat
and humidity..

Sad poem...and Greatly written!
there is evil

Glad you think the poem is well written. It's a new form to me and I like it a lot too. I like tinkering with the new and creating new forms and ideas from them.

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I edited for the typo. Only one? I'm getting better. Lol

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You still need to take your Renga advertisement down. New poet's will ask about it and you're not ready.
Feel better.

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