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Mother Earth
Mother Earth
So good you are
Patient you are to us
Your free gifts to us are precious
And the seasonal provisions
The plants and their flowers
The trees and their fruits
The animals and babies
Yet live and feed
The Virgin ground and water
All for our welfare

Grand mother nature
Never you stop supporting mother Earth
As you bless us with the air
The weather and atmospher
The wind and waves
The oxygen and clouds
The daylight and night to rest

Our hearts are weeping
Heavily beating for guilt of abuse
And violation of resources
Greed and selfishness
Evil and distraction lies in us
And we tear apart each other
Though your wrath and punishment
We have to embrace for our hearts desires.

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you posting this. Ok, just a few things to give you. I don't want to ruin the feel of your language transition to ours. I am beginning to appreciate that.
1] You don't need the [ ly ] on the impatient
2] seasons' not an [ r ]
3] No [s] on feed
4] Delete the line: never you stop supporting mother earth.

I think that when you complete these changes, you will have something a bit smoother. ~~ Geezer.

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correction or suggestion keep me going on because I write to learn and life itself is a teacher the more we live the more we learn thanks.

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Hello, Simon,
How beautiful this is. The simplicity and directness make it so endearing. I especially like the reference to Grandmother Nature. Beautiful work.
Thank you!

It's my having you comment on my work for you have no idea on how much your comment mean to me thank you once more.

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may I add a bit to Gee's suggestions.
6th line I would use seasonal rather seasoner
8th line did you mean you live and feed(drop the s on feeds) yet(you ?0
and water (no s)

2nd stanza 2nd line never( perhaps adding a do never do you stop)
I agree the transition to english can be very difficult but respect any dialect
tiny corrections but good poem heartfelt

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