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Editing - polished draft

Tangle Falls

Cascading water, escaping it's frozen jail,
dancing over rocks, it anxiously fell,
glacier water escaping it's genesis years,
bouncing over rocks, falling like tears,
it jigged and it jogged,
tangoing over fallen logs,
a tangled foot began to slip,
it suddenly lost it's grip,
I fall, fall, into the falls,
I fall, heeding their call,
I fall for it's charms,
falling into it's arms,
I fall, feeling their force,
I fall, following their course,
as it enfolded me,

Dream

I’ve touched success root.
Everyone’s desire is wealth ,
But never under estimate health..
For happiness is what we seek,
Perhaps deep in a dream I was.

Dream seems to be just,
But disappear like dust.
Everyone is a dreamer,
Only some reveals like drama.
In silent my bed talks ,
And in private my pillow interpret.
For I am still listening,
Until my dream comes true.

Polarized Perspectives:

All the world's A stage
As we rage and disengage
World is more a cage

BLACK IS BEAUTIFUL

I am unique you know!
Light and darkness is of great importance
Without hydroquinone, the morning dew
How can the charcoal turns light headed
Or disguise in another face unknown
Oh! Mothers tongue long aborted
The straw we all emanate from
Search for the black goat while the sun smiles.

Do You Really Like It?

What do we really like well let's think?
We can jot our thoughts finely pointed Ink.
Such curiosity something.more to think
I am an Apple computer link
clicking everything in seconds to blink

We are savvy writers a snack of words
We peck nestful of Robin birds
The love seed's the finer things
What we like everything becomes a need
Like your taste of mink indeed
So stirring eyes of wine
Like two drinkers wink
Are our hearts racing your car hums?

Spectator Spectacle:

Dawning village view
Landscape lush with morning dew
Birds trilling anew

Love is a peace weapon

The seamless seed of beatitude is love,
helplessly for its lushness we all crave.
Love genuine , breeds, nurtures peace;
erects a podium for elegance.

Hate, strife, could be carried in a gurney,
through a long, doomed and return less journey,
into a dark lonely ignoble hearse,
with a great unstoppable speed and ease .

If love across the universe is strewn,
until true blissfulness on earth is known
and everyone of us croons with one voice
from our hearts, harmonious songs of peace.

Peacocks Noel Wished

This was a fuel like no other
"Dynasty"
A feather love me down hard work of
"Gifts of Mastery"
Robin Renewal smiles came about
The ambiance so much potential
So loving and substantial
Her Eightfold path of wisdom

Lying In Bed, Just Like Brian Wilson Did

Inhale, ex-hale /heavily and loudly, (Action)
Inhale, exhale /heavily and loudly, (Action)
Inhale, exhale /heavily and loudly, (Action)
Eyes open, eyes shut, eyes open,
open eyes, shut eyes,
eyes open, eyes open, open eyes,
I realize, I surmise, I realize.
Tick, tock, tick, tock, tick goes the clock.
The clock ticks, the clock talks, the clock mocks,
the clock talks, the clock mocks.
Inhale, exhale / heavily and loudly, (Action)
Cough (Action)
Inhale, exhale / heavily and loudly (Action)

DEATH YOU WILL DIE

Death where is your license?
Who grants you that permission?
Nature, No.
But who?

Those dude’s I Know,
Shadow’s of memory,
Beneath your glutton end,
I sobbed with the moon and the sun,
I know one day you’ll burn.

Mama close the damp,
In your heart.
This festival of tears you must bind,
and let justice stretch her hands.

Death you are guilty,
like grains of sands their soul arises,
pointing fingers on you.
Even though plead guilty,
Who will be your lawyer?

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