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Cellar Door

Can you hear it?
Beneath the floor,
Knocking on the cellar door?

It's big and hairy, and just a bit scary.
Not short or small,
Breathing right behind the wall.

At night I hear it down below.
Roars and moans
As it's sorrow grows.

So lonely it must be.
For it's all alone you see?
It has no friends.

Beneath the floor,
It is simply forevermore
And just beyond the cellar door.

Stripping Kipling

a gentleman from the west
considering his culture the best
chronicling what he felt certain
penning The White Man’s Burden
policies provoking native unrest

A moment in the mortuary

stagnant bodies
starring continuously,
as if to talk, to walk, to jump
one asked a question
why toiling, why struggle?
this manure body of the earth,
and the divorced breath soul.

take a walk here with me,
where stars seize to shine
golds seize to glitter
where the strong and the weak harmonize,
where the poor and the rich unites
life is a journey, journey it well,
I took a moment to the mortuary.

I Think I'll Have Another

Bob Schoenbeck died
thirty years
after he took his last drink.

I never really considered alcoholism
until I realized
I couldn't get through my day
without a bottle,
at least not the stressful ones.

And I guess it doesn't matter
what we say to our therapists and friends.
The only important thing
is our perception, right?

And so I guess I'll have another.
Whatever.
I guess this
is where the long train ends.

THE BLACK CHRIST

They brought their cross to us
we carried it,
The white cross
replaced by the dying black cross
long buried in the cemetery of memory
This cumbersome cross
attached to the black neck

My mouth must not eat rotten yam
Blame me not either
A dance with the legacy of my father’s
The Amadioha of Ndi Igbo, the Sango of the Yoruba’s
a symbol of tourism long stolen
what story for the generation unborn
what will they see

Tangle Falls

Cascading water, escaping it's frozen jail,
dancing over rocks, it anxiously fell,
glacier water escaping it's genesis years,
bouncing over rocks, falling like tears,
it jigged and it jogged,
tangoing over fallen logs,
a tangled foot began to slip,
it suddenly lost it's grip,
I fall, fall, into the falls,
I fall, heeding their call,
I fall for it's charms,
falling into it's arms,
I fall, feeling their force,
I fall, following their course,
as it enfolded me,

Dream

I’ve touched success root.
Everyone’s desire is wealth ,
But never under estimate health..
For happiness is what we seek,
Perhaps deep in a dream I was.

Dream seems to be just,
But disappear like dust.
Everyone is a dreamer,
Only some reveals like drama.
In silent my bed talks ,
And in private my pillow interpret.
For I am still listening,
Until my dream comes true.

Polarized Perspectives:

All the world's A stage
As we rage and disengage
World is more a cage

BLACK IS BEAUTIFUL

I am unique you know!
Light and darkness is of great importance
Without hydroquinone, the morning dew
How can the charcoal turns light headed
Or disguise in another face unknown
Oh! Mothers tongue long aborted
The straw we all emanate from
Search for the black goat while the sun smiles.

Do You Really Like It?

What do we really like well let's think?
We can jot our thoughts finely pointed Ink.
Such curiosity something.more to think
I am an Apple computer link
clicking everything in seconds to blink

We are savvy writers a snack of words
We peck nestful of Robin birds
The love seed's the finer things
What we like everything becomes a need
Like your taste of mink indeed
So stirring eyes of wine
Like two drinkers wink
Are our hearts racing your car hums?

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