Patricia

Member since August 12, 2018

Member for 7 years, 9 months

advocate member

18 Poems

87 Comments

1 Follower

Most recent

Angel

Posted Jul 1, 2024 · 12 lines · 6 critiques

I see you there glowing,

like an angel in a darkened sky,

gentle as I ever seen.

I bow my head before your eyes.

But alas, you are sleeping,

And your eyes are closed.

It’s just a figment of my imagination,

you were there you really were.

I see no sense in what you are.

To me you are the most wonderful creature,

and maybe you truly are an angel,

sent from God to guide me.

Patricia’s timeline

December 2024
29 Sun

Critiqued
"Resurrection" by @mark
"I loved this poem.I have not seen anything like it.That showed a lot of creativity to me. Everything came to life and the pictures were deep in my mind. It's not your usual fallen angel story.I like the ending too. It f…"
July 2024
01 Mon

Received a critique
on Angel from @Geezer
"to present this just a little differently, like so: gentle as [I've] ever seen. But your eyes are closed you are sleeping. comma: "you were there, you really were." Nice stuff! ~ Geez. ."
01 Mon

Received a critique
on Angel from @Alex Tanner
"I liked this immensely, a nice soft read. A possible typo. Did you mean 'gentle' where you have 'gentile'? Alex."
01 Mon

Posted a poem
Angel
"I see you there glowing,"
Open thread 12 lines
August 2023
12 Sat

Anniversary
5 years of membership
October 2022
24 Mon

New follower
@Geezer
15 Sat

Critiqued
"The Pumpkin Patch" by @markold
"I got a kick out of this one. I love the beginning and the end and how they merge to find out what's really behind this sin lol I hope this didn't happen to you."
11 Tue

Critiqued
"Come High Water (collaborative workshop #8)" by @Workshops
"This is wonderful! If you have a group poem here, everyone did an excellent job. Congratulations to you all! Pat B"
September 2022
24 Sat

Posted a poem
My Trip Down Memory Lane
"A visit down memory lane,"
Open thread 17 lines
16 Fri

Critiqued
"Feelings of Expressions" by @markold
"Gee Mark this is a great poem but so sad. You'll always be with me because I won't leave without you Don't go away. I will miss you as I have the past 4 days. I won't leave you. One thing I learned is how much I need yo…"
May 2022
19 Thu

Critiqued
"THE OLD MAN SPEAKS" by @Ryhmgod
"I really loved this poem. The imagery was wonderful.I can't find anything wrong with it. It seemed so nostalgic. I wanted to read more. Keep on writing! Pat"
19 Thu

Critiqued
"The door" by @Jakub Zoltowski
"I thought this poem was great.t reminds me of that poem The Raven.I think you have a chance to win so keep on writing."
February 2022
19 Sat

Critiqued
"My Poem" by @markold
"this poem lit the roof off so im so glad you included the military it is also a great poem I wish I could do what you do. I think it was altogether a piece of an illustrated piece of art"
April 2020
19 Sun

Critiqued
"etchling" by @MrsEmarie
"This was an awesome poem. Short enough to be sweet and long enough to be a masterpiece. I await their betrayal too so why not start another poem beginning with this you could make a beauty. Congratulations on a fine poe…"
October 2019
13 Sun

Received a critique
on The Demise Of A Witch (October Contest) from @ThisIsMe
"This is beautiful poem, I especially love your rhyme pattern and the lines "Perhaps she was dead some of them said" and "not daring to take chances instead". Maybe think about changing the word order of the line "they f…"
12 Sat

Received a critique
on The Demise Of A Witch (October Contest) from @medes879
"I have to limit the amount of time I spent on Social media but I, also mentor up and coming talent in private. I firmly believe in constructive criticism but see no point in being critical just for the sake of it. I jus…"
12 Sat

Posted a poem
The Demise Of A Witch (October Contest)
"In a dress of red on an ocean bled"
Open thread 16 lines
September 2019
28 Sat

Received a critique
on Worthwhile (August Contest) from @chevyvent
"One has to enter inner meaning start the process to believe; Open your heart to transfigure the way paying homage to prayer; Savor each piece you got hold of here yet in right gear..."
16 Mon

Received a critique
on Dawn Of A Beautiful Day from @scribbler
"It seems to me this poem has 2 parts. The first describes the reasons for the protagonist's despair and the second describes the results. If this is so then something like " Being weary of woe I fall into a bottomless p…"
15 Sun

Posted a poem
Dawn Of A Beautiful Day
"Filled with antipathy"
Open thread 15 lines
04 Wed

Received a critique
on Worthwhile (August Contest) from @Sparrow 42
"Pat you is beat, My first was born in 1965, then 68, then 71, then 1980. But to talk about dates makes me feel older so we will say we just have kids lol. Since I remarried in 2003 I have inherited a great grand daughte…"
03 Tue

Received a critique
on Sore Feet from @Geezer
"reminds me of some people that I know. LoL I may decide to hijack those two words and use them for a title of my own. Thanks before hand, if in fact, I do. Yeah, yeah... I know, never give up and all that crap! I'm not…"
01 Sun

Posted a poem
Sore Feet
"Feel the pain"
Open thread 14 lines
August 2019
20 Tue

Posted a poem
Puzzle
"I see it yet it isn't there"
Open thread 10 lines
16 Fri

Posted a poem
You Rule My Darkness
"In dreamlike sleep you walk"
Open thread 19 lines
13 Tue

Posted a poem
Courtly Love
"Embrace me with your intellect"
Open thread 8 lines
12 Mon

Anniversary
One year of membership
11 Sun

Most-discussed work
Worthwhile (August Contest)

15 critiques to date.
11 Sun

Posted a poem
Worthwhile (August Contest)
"Remember me"
Open thread 33 lines
July 2019
21 Sun

Posted a poem
The Girl From Kentucky
"There once was a girl from Kentucky"
Open thread 5 lines
16 Tue

Posted a poem
The Best Fourth Of July (July Pleasures)
"It came to be when I was 9 years old."
Open thread 16 lines
June 2019
21 Fri

Posted a poem
Their Eyes (Primal Poetry Workshop)
"The eyes of the world are upon us."
Open thread 17 lines
February 2019
01 Fri

First publication
What I Wish For You
August 2018
13 Mon

First critique offered
on "Why Did I Love You (August Contest)" (since unpublished) by @Backbeat
12 Sun

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 173 days later.

About Me

Location: USA

Recent Work

Angel

Posted: 1 July, 2024

My Trip Down Memory Lane

Posted: 24 September, 2022

The Demise Of A Witch (October Contest)

Posted: 12 October, 2019

Dawn Of A Beautiful Day

Posted: 15 September, 2019

Sore Feet

Posted: 1 September, 2019

Puzzle

Posted: 20 August, 2019

You Rule My Darkness

Posted: 16 August, 2019

Courtly Love

Posted: 13 August, 2019

Worthwhile (August Contest)

Posted: 11 August, 2019

The Girl From Kentucky

Posted: 21 July, 2019

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Contest Wins

This member has not yet won any contests.

Workshops

		Skill level:
Immersing the reader via imagery (Let's get started)	(syllabus)	Splash Pool	Started 2019-09-16	Concluded
Primal Poetry	(syllabus)	Plunge Pool	Started 2019-06-17	Concluded

Followed By

Geezer

"Resurrection" by @mark

on Angel from @Geezer

on Angel from @Alex Tanner

5 years of membership

"The Pumpkin Patch" by @markold

"Come High Water (collaborative workshop #8)" by @Workshops

"Feelings of Expressions" by @markold

"THE OLD MAN SPEAKS" by @Ryhmgod

"The door" by @Jakub Zoltowski

"My Poem" by @markold

"etchling" by @MrsEmarie

on The Demise Of A Witch (October Contest) from @ThisIsMe

on The Demise Of A Witch (October Contest) from @medes879

on Worthwhile (August Contest) from @chevyvent

on Dawn Of A Beautiful Day from @scribbler

on Worthwhile (August Contest) from @Sparrow 42

on Sore Feet from @Geezer

One year of membership

on "Why Did I Love You (August Contest)" (since unpublished) by @Backbeat

Membership begins

About Me

Recent Work

Contest Wins

Workshops

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