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Sore Feet

Submitted by Patricia on Sun, 2019-09-01 11:44

Feel the pain
Passing through
Growling with each step
Making a mockery of you
You can’t even pace
Maybe a potion will help
Heal your heel
Hang your head
It’s only a passing itch
That you can’t scratch
Try new shoes
Try the towel wrap
But never stop marching
Even for your precious ache

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Geezer

Tue, 2019-09-03 14:42

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reminds me of some people that I know. LoL I may decide to hijack those two words and use them for a title of my own. Thanks before hand, if in fact, I do. Yeah, yeah... I know, never give up and all that crap! I'm not giving up, just gonna sit a spell with my feet in a tub of hot water and Epsom salts. You made those aches and pains too real. This was fun and something that we all can relate to! Geezer.
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Patricia

Tue, 2019-09-03 20:23

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Glad you enjoyed it. It was meant to be kinda fun but I know people like that too. Especially me lol.

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