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Seasoning...

Submitted by Geezer on Thu, 2011-08-11 00:07

Young, tender moon of spring
pale yellow and smooth as a mirror
The sight of you excites me

Now swollen and full of summer
Your face is lit with the sun
and I swoon in your light

Orange tinged and ruddy of complexion
imparting mysteries across your face
You are the huntress of my soul

A silver orb in icy reverie
reflects on white dunes of snow
Making my heart pound in ecstacy

Many faces and phases of Luna
all with their own special glow
To light my way

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lou

Thu, 2011-08-11 04:04

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I loved this strangely sensual, poem which I felt to be about women.

A very fertile theme. lol

love lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

Geezer

Thu, 2011-08-11 08:06

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one hundred percent correct! Love ya, ~ Gee
BTW, I did get the reference to fertility and Luna.

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Candlewitch

Wed, 2011-08-24 13:56

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I love the metaphors! She must be someone very special. As a moon gazer and worshiper, I really loved all moon references.

A silver orb in icy reverie
reflects on white dunes of snow
Making my heart pound in ecstacy

Many faces and phases of Luna
all with their own special glow
To light my way

always, Cat

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