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Rebirth apocalypse 2

Dark side of the universe
Abandoned soul survives alone
except for his dog.

Travels the wastelands in search 
Of another soul
In manic desperation for the human touch

Decades pass and all that arrives
Is mother nature
The earth becomes a verdant green

Opposite side of the of the earths' rebirth 
She waits by the graveside of her last link
To the time before the big bang.

Two stripped down strung out
Survivors barely holding onto sanity
Each oblivious to the other.   

 

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Second in the apocalypse series
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I connect with this write and this shows the excelling in your writing. Great job Lou.

Will be back to read more

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Mona

Thank you

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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I also liked this, it has every element of what makes excellent poetry..... if I may:

Dark side of the universe
Abandoned soul survives alone
Except for his dog

(not accept)

Travels the wastelands in search
Of another soul
In manic desperation for the human touch

(I'd omit *the*)

Decades pass and all that arrives
Is mother nature
The earth becomes a verdant green

(hope springs eternal, eh? wonderful lines)

Opposite side of the of the earth's rebirth (apostrophe)
She waits by the graveside of her last link
To the time before the big bang.

(loved this!)

Two stripped down strung out
Survivors barely holding onto sanity
Each oblivious to the other

(love love loved this, Lou!)

~A

Thanks Anna

Glad that you liked it, ill make the changes that you suggested.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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I'm glad you understand the poem.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

author comment

Thank you so much.

Love Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Why thank you kind sir

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

author comment

powerful images! The imcumbent hero, walking along with his dog. In a no man's land, just waiting for the earth to heal it'self, searching for someone to share it with. Epic! ~ Gee

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You got it !! Thank you.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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And I wouldn't be afraid to make each installment longer. Mine sure as hell are. wesley

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