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Piss Off...

Your gods are imaginated, your values really suck
I'm everything you've hated and I don't give a fuck
What makes you think that you're so great;
" I'm better than you are? "
Compared to you, a maggot, is a flaming star

Perverted priests of your religions, bugger little kids
Your leaders and your heroes, put us on financial skids
You talk about world peace, while destroying other's citys
Blow up little children, while they're sucking mommy's titties

I hate you all, each and everyone, hick farmers and the cops
Teachers, politicians... and janitors swinging mops
Old ladies driving oh so slow, Boy Scouts and Girl Scouts too
Marines and sailors, Airforce, protecting us, from all of you

The nice guy lets you go first, makes another later still
Now he'll have to drive a little faster; boy, if looks could kill
Sister Sue, goes to church on every goddam' Sunday
She's fucking half the football team, on any given Monday

Nice people are just hiding, dirty secrets from us all
Daddy rubs his cock, at the teen girl from down the hall
Your Momma has the hots, for the morning game-show host
She masturbates while watching, and eating buttered toast

You entertain ideas, just thinking, you understand
I didn't do it; I didn't sin, I just used my hand!
I hate you all, you can't judge me, you don't have the right
You do-gooders and fucked up people, don't really see the light

I'm not really evil, how dare you think it so
I'm just telling secrets, the ones you don't want to know
I'll bet, if you were to think, about it for a minute
You would find that it's the truth, and this poem... you are in it

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Last few words: 
I think I like this one better, although the vacuum-cleaner salesman is a real crumb. ~ Gee
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I did tell 'em huh? I thought that I might have gone just a little bit over, but from the comments, I think not! Thanks, Lonnie. ~ Gee

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its like whistle blowing
each fucker knows ,
we all use our hands,
more than our minds
and your poetry
excels more
than mines
wonderful nudity
at its naked best
i hope others give a standing ovation
while one 's does stand

loved

like hearing what you have to say, Loved. You don't think it went too far? I love that line about wonderful nudity at it's naked best. You have improved much since I first read your work. I might not always comment or critique your poems, but I always read them! ~ Gee

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Than I deserve...
Thanks for your lovely consoling soothing magnificent
And
so many more superlative words...

How I wish more folks like you walked this
EARTH
it takes decades to learn
and
I am endeavouring ,
nay STRUGGLING STILL

loved

wish I had wrote it.

cheers,
Jess
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that high praise from you! I tried to model it after something I think you would have written, so I guess I did good, huh? Thanks, ~ Gee

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If you can ever get over your reluctance to say what you really feel, you might be able to write a poem like this.....oops, too late lmao....................stan

for the read and comment, I tried hard to piss off almost everyone I could think of, but everybody seems to like it! Even the folks down at the taxi office and some of my passengers even want a copy of it. ~ Gee

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I'll use a word I normally dislike, but is absolutely appropriate here.

Briliant.

And no, not over the top at all.

I echo Jess's opinion; I wish it mine.

Bookmarked.

Respectfully, Jim

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I am flattered. I always like to hear that people like what I wrote, but this one exceeded my expectations. i thought for sure that someone would hate it! LOL~ Gee

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There are some problems with meter here that probably only bother me, but the poem as a whole is a rich, romping rant.
wesley

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there are a couple of places that stumble just a bit, but I think that I will eventually smooth them out. Just enjoying the moment right now. Thank you, ~ Gee

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Well... I think it is completely over the top! and I love it! An excellently atempt and success at offending everyone!

always, Cat

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was at least moderatly offended. LOL I like to think that I got everyone to thinking about the little secrets that we all have and don't want anyone to find out. We all have them!
~ Gee

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Don't you just hate raving & ranting poets? I do. Seems they're the ones who spout off with the truth that no one will be wiser if found.

Smile.

~A

Those people just don't know when to leave well enough alone! LOL ~ Gee

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stuff like this makes me laugh, because who you wrote for will never understand.
Great piece of writing my friend, I thought it as matter-o-fact.

Eddie

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IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
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and I wrote it for everyone! LOL ~ Gee

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that you got that big of a laugh at this one. I meant it to be funny, as well as insulting. I guess I did a pretty good job! Thanks for the read and the comment, ~ Gee P.S. Feel free to critique it any time.

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*stands and cheers* I absolutely love the tenacity of this write. Just the unabashed waving of the middle finger at everyone. Over the top? EH! Now't of the soart!

~ Jess K
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you in quite awhile. Just coming back to the site? Glad to see you in any case. Thanks for the read and comment.This was a challenge from weird elf, to see how many people we could piss off. From what I have seen of the comments, everybody likes it! How far do one have to go to piss people off? LOL Thanks for stopping by, ~ Geezer

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you're going to have to try harder, it seems.
Try getting to the nitty gritty of faith.

cheers,
Jess
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Maybe I should attack the idea of faith it'self?
Happy Newe Year Jess! ~ Gee

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