emogothgirl

Member since September 29, 2009

Member for 16 years, 8 months

advocate member

95 Poems

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When Darkness Falls (March Contest)

Posted Mar 9, 2015 · 16 lines · 20 critiques

i know that somewhere there is light
my house is dark, but have no fright,
i've nightlights up and down the hall
they shine though they are very small

the sky is black, no pinpricks bright
i know that somewhere there is light
there's really nowhere else to go
I try to keep my breathing slow

the wind is picking up i hear
perhaps the clouds will fin'lly clear
i know that somewhere there is light
though shadows loom both left and right

my fear may get the best of me
but even though i'm blind, i see,
behind some cloud, even at night,
i know that somewhere there is light.

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September 2024
28 Sat

Anniversary
15 years of membership
September 2019
28 Sat

Anniversary
10 years of membership
October 2016
10 Mon

Received a critique
on Some Kind of Phoenix, You Are from @Esker
"the longing have it bad for someone never reciprocated or fire ignited but dismissed On it goes... strange thing about Love not about balance or anything rational at all... We could be so good together. Metaphor... If o…"
August 2016
22 Mon

Received a critique
on And So It Goes, As A Seasonal Affair from @Esker
"hurricane season wind blew a large tree over and put out four thousand without power around cedar heights "driving with the low beams" I remember those misted weather days....thinking behind the wheel if I drove today i…"
April 2015
01 Wed

Received a critique
on When Darkness Falls (March Contest) from @raj
"Sorry Mag, my guess was wrong. Regards,"
March 2015
30 Mon

Received a critique
on When Darkness Falls (March Contest) from @raj
"I may be guessing...though I wouldn't bet...in my opinion you are the strongest contender to win the March Contest...we will know soon if I guessed right... Regards,"
29 Sun

Received a critique
on When Darkness Falls (March Contest) from @alidzain
"Nice going there! WOW! Seems like we really have very strong participants for the March contest. Makes me wonder who is going to win. Anyway, you've done well in this piece. (applause!!) Alid"
28 Sat

Critiqued
"write me down" by @AMOGELANG MOKOBANE
"http://neopoetofficial.tumblr.com/ Thanks! Mag"
17 Tue

Received a critique
on When Darkness Falls (March Contest) from @Sparrow
"I think it is awful and not really suitable for the March competition. Because it may beat mine, I really hate coming second all the time. LOL Great write there young lady but please don't try so hard next time, lol You…"
16 Mon

Critiqued
"Her" by @riotface97
"and i must say i'm really relating with it on quite a few levels. very well done. may i post it on our official blog (with credit to you of course)? Mag"
13 Fri

Received a critique
on When Darkness Falls (March Contest) from @raj
"I couldn't help myself returning to this lovely piece of imagination and creativity, I wish there was an icon for a loud clap...the contest judge/s are really going to have it tough to adjudicate one winner... Regards,"
13 Fri

Critiqued
"Glitch" by @eliminist
"the only thing that bugs me is all of your punctuation. alas, it may be due to a guy i knew (he annoyed the crap out of me) always used at least ONE ellipsis for dramatic effect in almost every single sentence he ever p…"
13 Fri

Critiqued
"TO WACO AT 2 YEARS" by @scribbler
"i love listening to spoken word from all kinds of voices, i think it really adds personality to the performance no matter what the voice sounds like. donald duck and a bumble bee, i find that kind of hard to imagine lmao"
12 Thu

Received a critique
on When Darkness Falls (March Contest) from @wesley snow
"Your "fin'ly" needs two "L"s. Fin'lly. Finally."
11 Wed

Critiqued
"TO WACO AT 2 YEARS" by @scribbler
"i await your spoken word with baited breath, stan. it's great to see that more people are getting into it :) also, referring to prior comments, Wesley is a genius with meter. i'd consider him the go-to guy on neo."
11 Wed

Critiqued
"At the light of the moon (March Contest)" by @Barbara Writes
"it almost seems to me that our poems are opposites! i like that. aside from your syllable count in some spots, this is a nice quatern. good job. Mag"
09 Mon

Most-discussed work
When Darkness Falls (March Contest)

20 critiques to date.
09 Mon

Posted a poem
When Darkness Falls (March Contest)
"i know that somewhere there is light"
Open thread 16 lines
09 Mon

Critiqued
"A Melancholy Pilgrimage (March Contest)" by @Pugilist
"this form is awesome; I always thought the repetition of the line made a poem sort of mysterious, as it seems the rest of the poem is built around it naturally. I like how you deviated from the usual love theme! and you…"
09 Mon

Critiqued
"My Sweet Home (Effective Con. Pastoral Poetry WS) Rula, Ian, Wesley" by @Rula
"this is really well developed in regards to the collaboration, it flows very well and maintains the main idea vividly. nice job. tighten up the grammar a little bit (surroundings, etc.) and you're golden. Mag"
03 Tue

Posted a poem
And So It Goes, As A Seasonal Affair
"my flowers took root in the ground."
Open thread 49 lines
February 2015
23 Mon

New follower
@lovedly
09 Mon

Posted a poem
For Niamh, A Stranger
"you, irish girl, i will never see you again"
Open thread 18 lines
04 Wed

Posted a poem
Some Kind of Phoenix, You Are
"i am on fire."
Open thread 53 lines
January 2015
29 Thu

Posted a poem
You're Too Forgetful. (spoken word with recording)
"when looking at old pictures don’t forget to look forward."
Open thread 29 lines
09 Fri

Posted a poem
Fraudulence
"silence. absence."
Open thread 15 lines
05 Mon

Posted a poem
There's A First For Everything
"my body shook, bones literally rattled,"
Open thread 14 lines
December 2014
31 Wed

Posted a poem
"for you"
"a message."
Open thread 31 lines
24 Wed

Posted a poem
I Want To Hear Your Heart
"i want to tell you about my day, every day"
Open thread 36 lines
22 Mon

Posted a poem
Today I Am Eighteen: A Timeline
"five forty five AM. i am awake now."
Open thread 72 lines
21 Sun

Posted a poem
I Swear I'm Not A Stalker But, I Imagine Things.
"i am lurking in a corner of the cafe,"
Open thread 33 lines
12 Fri

Posted a poem
Did You Ever Think That Maybe, Just MAYBE, You Actually Make Me Happy?
"you are sunlight on ice."
Open thread 6 lines
September 2014
28 Sun

Anniversary
5 years of membership
March 2012
20 Tue

New follower
@Cloudthings
15 Thu

Highest posting month
March 2012 — 10 poems
11 Sun

New follower
@AuroraBorealis
February 2012
20 Mon

New follower
@Starlight
September 2010
28 Tue

Anniversary
One year of membership
October 2009
01 Thu

First critique offered
on "Love-Spell" by @Hooded Stranger
September 2009
29 Tue

First publication
fly
28 Mon

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.

About Me

About me

college? yeah that's about it huh

Location: somewhere in the middle of the mountains, USA

Favorite Poets

life.

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Workshops

		Skill level:
IMAGERY IN POETRY (for everyone)	(syllabus)	Plunge Pool	Started 2012-03-09	Concluded
Working With Titles	(syllabus)	Wading Pool, Splash Pool	Started 2012-01-30	Concluded
More Meter	(syllabus)	Shark Pool, Plunge Pool	Started 2012-01-11	Concluded

15 years of membership

10 years of membership

on Some Kind of Phoenix, You Are from @Esker

on And So It Goes, As A Seasonal Affair from @Esker

on When Darkness Falls (March Contest) from @raj

on When Darkness Falls (March Contest) from @raj

on When Darkness Falls (March Contest) from @alidzain

"write me down" by @AMOGELANG MOKOBANE

on When Darkness Falls (March Contest) from @Sparrow

"Her" by @riotface97

on When Darkness Falls (March Contest) from @raj

"Glitch" by @eliminist

"TO WACO AT 2 YEARS" by @scribbler

on When Darkness Falls (March Contest) from @wesley snow

"TO WACO AT 2 YEARS" by @scribbler

"At the light of the moon (March Contest)" by @Barbara Writes

"A Melancholy Pilgrimage (March Contest)" by @Pugilist

"My Sweet Home (Effective Con. Pastoral Poetry WS) Rula, Ian, Wesley" by @Rula

5 years of membership

March 2012 — 10 poems

One year of membership

on "Love-Spell" by @Hooded Stranger

Membership begins

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