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Dandy Lion
The mountain lion looked around
in search of some kind of treat,
he knew not, from where it’d come
he just had to have some meat.
It seemed he’d searched for quite some time
hunger starting up a trauma,
when finally his eyes did find
a healthy piece of brahma.
He caught his meat-and he did eat
‘twas even better than a deli,
he ate up almost all his prize
and severely gorged his belly.
Proud of himself, and of his catch
he laid down on the canyon floor,
his contentedness he could not contain
so the lion began to roar.
A hunter happened to hear the noise
and a shot came from a finger pull,
and the morale of this story's got to be,
“Keep quiet, when you’re full of bull !”
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Comments
Ian.T
Tue, 2012-07-17 16:20
Doc
Well done a good turn to laughter at the end, this we expect and no disappointment here, Yours Ian.T
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docmaverick
Tue, 2012-07-17 12:45
Thanx Ian....
...am glad you got a chuckle!
doc.
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Rula
Tue, 2012-07-17 13:15
A good moral
Indeed and not without a smile.Just what I needed to end my tiring day:-)
Thanks doc.
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docmaverick
Tue, 2012-07-17 16:20
Quite welcome!
doc
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Candlewitch
Wed, 2012-07-18 10:40
hello Doc,
a senic tale which flows along smoothly, ending in a good moral! I got a good laugh at the end. Thanks for the laughter! A great gift of story telling!
always, Cat
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docmaverick
Thu, 2012-07-19 13:16
Hey Cat...
...I really am happy that this one caught your eye. Been going through it, of late. I had 2 separate surgeries on my left eye. The first one didn't re-attatch my torn retina, soo....it was off to L.A. for some open eyeball surgery where I'm hoping they got it right.
The Doctor told me yesterday that, my sight will return to me in about 3 more weeks. Sheeesh!
Truly happy this brought a smile,
doc.
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